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We are always faced with bad things. Although our lives have been made really, really easier with new things, our very fast lifestyles have also made us more and more stresed. In this essay, I will chat with you about the starting places of stress and how it can be cut out.
修改：
l always-à constantly, continuously, continually；
l 本段第一个句子改为：People living in modern society are constantly faced with …
l bad thingsàstressful situations/hectic events/taxing experiences/
l really, really easieràabsolutely easy
l new thingsànew technologies/inventions
l very fast lifestyleàfast-paced lifestyle
l stresedàstressed
l chat with you aboutà discuss/analyse
l starting placesàcauses
l cut outàalleviated